Maybe if you made it into a chapter story it’d be better, and not so hurried. X Video So great! Also, I hate to be a grammar nazi, but the continuous flow, instead of proper paragraphs with the dialogue make it difficult to read. Maybe if you made it into a chapter story it’d be better, and not so hurried. So great! So great! So great! Also, I hate to be a grammar nazi, but the continuous flow, instead of proper paragraphs with the dialogue make it difficult to read. Other than that, though, wonderful job.READERReport 2008-02-11 11:23:19I liked it Steph, I don’t have a sexy friend. 5 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-05-22 22:09:37I loved it! The flow could use work and it could have been lnger though.anonymous readerReport 2012-02-02 01:13:17I liked it, though I’d think better of it if
