If not, then either do some research and read other people’s work, get laid, or find a new hobby. Some things to improve:
I would recommend proof-reading/spell-checking before submitting your work. XXX Video Be a little more descriptive, and draw out the story a little more. If this is your very first piece of ero-literature, then you are off to a okay start. Some things to improve:
I would recommend proof-reading/spell-checking before submitting your work. However, this one sadly made my stomach churn DUE TO THE FACT THAT THIS ONE WAS POORLY WRITTEN. However, this one sadly made my stomach churn DUE TO THE FACT THAT THIS ONE WAS POORLY WRITTEN.
