You have a great story line, but slow down and give more detail.READERReport 2005-11-16 09:21:42Great story line ! XXX You have a great story line, but slow down and give more detail.READERReport 2005-11-16 09:21:42Great story line ! 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-05-22 20:14:25I agree with the other reviewer. 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-05-22 20:14:25I agree with the other reviewer. You have a great story line, but slow down and give more detail.READERReport 2005-11-16 09:21:42Great story line ! You have a great story line, but slow down and give more detail.READERReport 2005-11-16 09:21:42Great story line ! 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-05-22 20:14:25I agree with the other reviewer. You have a great story line, but slow down and give more detail.READERReport 2005-11-16 09:21:42Great story line !
