2 comments«1»BlackRoninReport 2011-10-25 05:12:26This is not bad, but sloppy. Basic stuff like this is dull, but still important.anonymous readerReport 2011-09-29 19:41:06great story, bit slow to get started but got better«1» Grammar, spelling, and syntax are pretty rundown, and it inhibits the story. XXX Video Basic stuff like this is dull, but still important.anonymous readerReport 2011-09-29 19:41:06great story, bit slow to get started but got better«1» Grammar, spelling, and syntax are pretty rundown, and it inhibits the story. Basic stuff like this is dull, but still important.anonymous readerReport 2011-09-29 19:41:06great story, bit slow to get started but got better«1» Basic stuff like this is dull, but still important.anonymous readerReport 2011-09-29 19:41:06great story, bit slow to get started but got better«1»
