who are they and why should we care about them or want them together? DID THEY EVER FEEL ANYTHING FOR EACH OTHER BEFORE THIS? XXX WHERE ARE THE PARENTS? WHERE ARE THEY? personality and character traits, how they interact in normal situations, etc. YOU NEED A LOT MORE DETAIL AND AND A MUCH LONGER CHAPTER TO TELL THE STORY. WHAT KIND OF RELATIONSHIP DID THEY HAVE BEFORE THIS? WHAT KIND OF SEXUAL EXPERIENCE DO THEY HAVE. WHERE ARE THEY? HOW OLD ARE THEY? HOW OLD ARE THEY? YOU NEED A LOT MORE DETAIL AND AND A MUCH LONGER CHAPTER TO TELL THE STORY.
